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The given picture illustrates the process by which cement and concrete are produced.

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The given picture illustrates the process by which cement and concrete are produced. Overall, it is clear that there are five states in the production of cement, while the procedure for producing concrete from cement and a few other simple ingredients involves a single state. In the first stage of process for cement, limestone and clay are crushed using two rotating drums to make a fine powder which is then mixed in a cylindrical mixer before being involved a tube-like rotating heater with a blowtorch mounted at its bottom opening. The mixed powder is fed from the top and simultaneously heated and blended. After this stage has been completed, the result is transferred to a grinder using a conveyor belt and then packed in bags. This cement is used as raw material in the procedure of concrete in a second proces. An initial mixture composed of 15% cement, 25% sand, 10% water and 50% gravel is fed into a rotating concrete mixer, where the ingredients are stirred until the concrete mix is ready for construction purposes.
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picture illustrates the process by which
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cement
and concrete
are produced
.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that there are five states in the production of
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cement
, while the procedure for producing concrete from
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cement
and a few other simple ingredients involves a single state.

In the
first
stage of process for
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cement
, limestone and clay
are crushed
using two rotating drums to
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make
a fine powder which is then mixed in a cylindrical mixer
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before
being involved
a tube-like rotating heater with a blowtorch mounted at its bottom opening. The mixed powder
is fed
from the top and
simultaneously
heated and blended. After this stage has
been completed
, the result
is transferred
to a grinder using a conveyor belt and then packed in bags.

This
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cement
is
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used
as raw material in the procedure of concrete in a second
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proces
. An initial mixture composed of 15%
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cement
, 25% sand, 10% water and 50% gravel
is fed
into a rotating concrete mixer, where the ingredients
are stirred
until the concrete mix is ready for construction purposes.
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IELTS academic The given picture illustrates the process by which cement and concrete are produced.

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