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The given bar chart illustrates which means of transport young people in four countries prefer the most according to 3 categories.

The given bar chart illustrates which means of transport young people in four countries prefer the most according to 3 categories. 73bYn
The given bar chart illustrates which means of transport young people in four countries prefer the most according to 3 categories. Overall, it is apparent that cars were the most preferred vehicle in all counties, except for Germany. Contrastingly, the young in other regions were much less likely to drive motorcycles, except for the USA. In detail, the percentage of cars that were used by young citizens in France was the highest of all time, at barely three quarters. In addition, the figure for the USA and Great Britain shared the same level in this category with exactly 60%, higher than the last country of Germany, the only place where cars were not the first choice for the young, by 20%. In terms of bicycle, it was the most popular selection for the young in Germany, at around 45%. In contrast, the figures for other cities: Great Britain, France and USA were much lower than that for cars, with 30%, 15% and 10% respectively. Moreover, with 30%, the proportion of motorcycles in the USA was the highest while the data of three other countries were lower, ranging from 10% to 15%.
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in four countries prefer the most according to 3 categories.

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were the most preferred vehicle in all counties,
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except for
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in other regions were much less likely to drive motorcycles,
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citizens in France was the highest of all time, at
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place where
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, by 20%.

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terms of bicycle, it was the most popular selection for the
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in Germany, at around 45%.
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contrast, the figures for other cities: Great Britain, France and USA were much lower than that for
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, with 30%, 15% and 10%
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, with 30%, the proportion of motorcycles in the USA was the highest while the data of three other countries were lower, ranging from 10% to 15%.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates which means of transport young people in four countries prefer the most according to 3 categories.

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