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The given graph shows the percentage of secondary school leavers who the employed, unemployed and further education in1980,1990 and 2000.

The given graph shows the percentage of secondary school leavers who the employed, unemployed and further education in1980, 1990 and 2000. eEOkV
The given three pie charts illustrate the Australian student ratio who had completed secondary schooling in 1980, 1990 and 2000 and either went for job and further studies or remained jobless. Overall, it can be seen that in each year percentages of unemployed people remained minimum, while other categories had experienced maximum proportion of pupils. In terms of, the individuals who opted for the higher education. In 1980, after finishing secondary school, 40% of people chose to do further degree and this option experienced tenfold rise to 50% in 1990, while after 10 years this ratio rose to only 5%. In relation with, the employment and unemployed students' percentage. According to the chart proportion of the secondary school graduates who got job was 50% in 1980, fell to 38% and 37% in 1990 and 2000. Finally, the ratio of school leavers who didn't get work showed no particular change. Basically the percentage of unemployed in 1980 was two times that of in 1990, which went down after 10 years and remained only 8%.
The
given
three pie charts illustrate the Australian student ratio
who
had completed secondary schooling in 1980, 1990 and 2000 and either went for job and
further
studies or remained jobless.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that in each year percentages of unemployed
people
remained minimum, while other categories had experienced maximum proportion of pupils.

In terms of, the individuals
who
opted for the higher education. In 1980, after finishing secondary school, 40% of
people
chose to do
further
degree and this option experienced tenfold rise to 50% in 1990, while after 10 years this ratio rose to
only
5%.

In
relation with, the employment and unemployed students' percentage. According to the chart proportion of the secondary school graduates
who
got
job was 50% in 1980, fell to 38% and 37% in 1990 and 2000.
Finally
, the ratio of
school leavers
who
didn't
get
work
showed
no particular
change
.
Basically
the percentage of unemployed in 1980 was two times that of in 1990, which went down after 10 years and remained
only
8%.

IELTS academic The given graph shows the percentage of secondary school leavers who the employed, unemployed and further education in1980, 1990 and 2000.

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