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The given diagram provided information on financial support received by four different countries.

The given diagram provided information on financial support received by four different countries. 8xG05
The given diagrams provided information about the financial support received by four nations, as well as their distribution. By taking a first glance at the graphs, a significant drop of received funds can be seen. In the bar graph, the given information informed readers about how monetary support was spent. Medicine have used most of the funds in 1974, however after 40 years, finance became the most important factor to distribute. It is also worth highlighting that there was a dramatic fall of money used for catering (from 70 million to 15 million), which was witnessed in 2014. The second table demonstrated a clear comparison of the amount of monetary funds obtained by China, Indonesia, Thailand, and South Africa. Although all four countries have received less support in 2014 when compared with the values in 1974, China was the country that received the least amount of funds (6 million). Overall, the table and the bar graph above used statistical data to inform the reader about monetary aids in different countries, and it is convincible that less funds have been provided to these listed nations.
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diagrams provided information about the financial support
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received
by four nations,
as well
as their distribution. By taking a
first
glance at the graphs, a significant drop of
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received
funds can be
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seen
.

In the bar graph, the
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given
information informed readers about how monetary support
was spent
. Medicine have
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used
most of the funds in 1974,
however
after 40 years, finance became the most
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important
factor to distribute. It is
also
worth highlighting that there was a dramatic fall of money
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used
for catering (from 70 million to 15 million), which
was witnessed
in 2014.

The second table demonstrated a
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clear
comparison of the amount of monetary funds obtained by China, Indonesia, Thailand, and South Africa. Although all four countries have
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received
less support in 2014 when compared with the values in 1974, China was the country that
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received
the least amount of funds (6 million).

Overall
, the table and the bar graph above
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used
statistical data to inform the reader about monetary aids in
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different
countries, and it is
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convincible
that
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less
funds have
been provided
to these listed nations.
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IELTS academic The given diagram provided information on financial support received by four different countries.

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