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The given diagram illustrates the way in which aluminium drinks cans are recycled.

The given diagram illustrates the way in which aluminium drinks cans are recycled. naAP
The given diagram illustrates the way in which aluminium drinks cans are recycled. Overall it can be seen that this process consists of 3 stages. Beginning with collecting cans and ending up with making aluminium cans. This process uses different methods and high temperature. The first stage of recycling aluminium cans is gather empty used cans to the collection centre and these cans are then transported to the recycling centre by a truck. In the recycling centre old cans are melted down. In this stage high temperature is used. After melting down liquid aluminium is become new aluminium solid. After that using machineries new aluminium is converted to aluminium rolls. Before deliverying, these roll are converted into new cans. Finally new products are filled with drinks and they are placed into drinks machine.
The
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given
diagram illustrates the way in which
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aluminium
drinks
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cans
are recycled
.

Overall
it
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can
be
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seen
that this process consists of 3 stages. Beginning with collecting
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cans
and ending up with making
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aluminium
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cans
. This process
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uses
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different
methods and high temperature.

The
first
stage of recycling
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aluminium
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cans
is gather empty
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used
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cans
to the collection
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centre
and these
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cans
are then transported to the recycling
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centre
by a truck.

In the recycling
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centre
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old
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cans
are melted
down. In this stage high temperature is
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used
.
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After
melting down liquid
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aluminium
is become
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new
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aluminium
solid.
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After
that using
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machineries
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new
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aluminium
is converted
to
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aluminium
rolls.
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Before
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deliverying
,
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these roll
are converted
into
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new
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cans
.
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Finally
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new
products
are filled
with
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drinks and
they
are placed
into drinks machine.

IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates the way in which aluminium drinks cans are recycled.

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133 words
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