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The given charts outline a detailed data of Olympic game participants entered since 1924 to 2012.

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The given charts outline a detailed data of Olympic game participants entered since 1924 to 2012. Overall, an upward trend can be seen in the number of male participants over the years 1924-2012, while a significant increase can be seen in the number of women participants between the years 1984 and 2012. Turning to the bar chart, the number of the men participants has increased gradually from 3000 to 5900 within the years 1924-2012. While the number of female participants were less then 200 in the onset year 1924. After which a significant increase has seen in the number of the participants from 1700 to 4800 between the years 1984 and 2012. Turning to the line graph, it reveals an upward trend of all participants from 1924 to 2012. The number of the participants were 3000 in the year 1924 and this number has increased gradually to 6200 by the year 1984. After which a rapid increase has occurred in number of the participants from 6200 to 10200 since 2012.
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, an upward trend can be
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of male
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over the years 1924-2012, while a significant increase can be
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of women
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participants
between the years 1984 and 2012.

Turning to the bar chart, the
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number
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men
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has increased
gradually
from 3000 to 5900 within the years 1924-2012. While the
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number
of female
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were less
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200 in the onset
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year
1924. After which a significant increase has
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seen
in the
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number
of the
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participants
from 1700 to 4800 between the years 1984 and 2012.

Turning to the line graph, it reveals an upward trend of all
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participants
from 1924 to 2012.

The
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number
of the
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participants
were 3000 in the
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year
1924 and this
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number
has increased
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to 6200 by the
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1984. After which a rapid increase has occurred in
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of the
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participants
from 6200 to 10200 since 2012.
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IELTS academic The given charts outline a detailed data of Olympic game participants entered since 1924 to 2012.

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