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The given bar graph shows information of rentals and sales of films from a particular store between 20027 and 2011.

The given bar graph shows information of rentals and sales of films from a particular store between 20027 and 2011. LbKK3

The bar chart represents data about the values of rentals and sales of movies from certain store between 2002 and 2011. Looking from an Overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the rentals value were increased throughout the given period. While VHS sales and Blu - ray sales stayed considerably low. Looking at the bar graph in detail, in the starting year, the value of rentals was approximately 18500 and it was decreased in the next three with 150, 000. Moreover, this figure showed downward trend with given span and it reached at 20, 000 in last year. Later on, the number of VHS sales were merely above 15, 0000 in the 2002 in t 2003. This increased from 150, 000 to 60, 000. In addition, only 10, 000 VHS were sold in 2005. Turning to the next sales, near about 50, 000 DVD were bought by people in 2002 and it increased to 160, 000 in the 2005. After that, it remained stable from 2006 to 2008. This figure showed inclining trend in the next three years. while Blu-ray sales purchase started from 2007 around 7, 000.

The bar chart represents data about the values of rentals and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
 of movies from certain store between 2002 and 2011.

Looking from an Overall
 perspective, it is readily
 apparent that the rentals value were increased
 throughout the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 period. While VHS You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
 and Blu Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
-
 ray You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
 stayed considerably
 low.

Looking at the bar graph in detail, in the starting year, the value of rentals was approximately 18500 and it was decreased
 in the next
 three with 150, 000. Moreover
, this figure This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 downward trend with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 span and it reached at 20, 000 in last year. Later on, the number of VHS You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
 were merely
 above 15, 0000 in the 2002 in t 2003. This increased from 150, 000 to 60, 000. In addition
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 10, 000 VHS were sold
 in 2005. Turning to the next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
, near about 50, 000 DVD were This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 by This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 in 2002 and it increased to 160, 000 in the 2005. After that, it remained stable from 2006 to 2008. This figure This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 inclining trend in the next
 three years. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterWhile
while
 Blu-ray You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 2007 to 7"?from 2007 to 7
from 2007 around 7
, 000. 