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The given bar graph represents the percentage of money donated to the charity by British people according to their age group.

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The given bar graph represents the percentage of money donated to the charity by British people according to their age group. It represents the years 1990 and 2010. The y axis represents the percentage whereas the x axis represents the age. The year 1990 is represented by yellow and 2010 as green. The percentage of people donating money in 1990 to charity has steadily increased till 36-50 years old by reaching a peak of 43%(approx. ) and began to fall. In 2010, they follow the similar trend but the reach a maximum of 39% from 51-65 years old. The maximum difference between 1990 and 2010 is 10%, which is from 18-25 age group. On the other hand, the least difference percentage has been encountered for age groups above 65 with 3% in change. The chart follows the same pattern for less than 50 years. It begun to change inversely for greater than 50. Both the years have followed the similar pattern with a rise and different fall times.
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of money donated to the charity by British
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1990
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donating money in 1990 to charity has
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increased till 36-50 years
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by reaching a peak of 43%(approx.
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and began to fall. In 2010, they follow the similar trend
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the reach a maximum of 39% from 51-65 years
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. The maximum difference between 1990 and 2010 is 10%, which is from 18-25
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group.
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, the least difference
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for
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groups above 65 with 3% in
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.

The chart follows the same pattern for less than 50 years. It
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inversely
for greater than 50. Both the years have followed the similar pattern with a rise and
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different
fall times.
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IELTS academic The given bar graph represents the percentage of money donated to the charity by British people according to their age group.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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