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The given bar graph depicts the information about percentage of population in India, china, USA and Japan in 1950 and 2000, and also shows the predictions till 2050.

The given bar graph depicts the information about percentage of population in India, china, USA and Japan in 1950 and 2000, and also shows the predictions till 2050. jVkgX
Overall, it is clear that there was highest population of China between 1950 and 2000, however in 2050, the ratio of China will decrease as compared to India. To begin with, in 1950, the percentage of china was maximum and little over a quarter of a world population, but it was a decrease from quarter and stood at 24% in 2000. After that, it is estimated that the population of china will decline in 2050 and it will lesa than 20%. Probing further, the percentage of India was inversely proportional to China in 1950 and it was only 15%. In India there was a decrease population by 2000 and which was approximately 19%. whereas, it is projected that the ratio will greatest in 2050. Apart from that, the ratio of Japan and the USA also decreased from 10% and 5% in 1950, but in 2000 the ratio of 7. 5% and 4% respectively. It is estimated that will remain same in the USA, while in japan, it will decline 3% by 2050.
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of China will decrease as compared to India. To
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over a quarter of a world
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,
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it was a decrease from quarter and stood at 24% in 2000. After that, it
is estimated
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of china will decline in 2050 and it will
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than 20%. Probing
further
, the percentage of India was
inversely
proportional to China in 1950 and it was
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15%. In India there was a decrease
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population
by 2000 and which was approximately 19%.
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whereas
, it
is projected
that the
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ratio
will greatest in 2050. Apart from that, the
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of Japan and the USA
also
decreased from 10% and 5% in 1950,
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in 2000 the
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of 7. 5% and 4%
respectively
. It
is estimated
that will remain same in the USA, while in japan, it will decline 3% by 2050.

IELTS academic The given bar graph depicts the information about percentage of population in India, china, USA and Japan in 1950 and 2000, and also shows the predictions till 2050.

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