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The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of various age group male and female who regularly involved in physical activity in the year 2010.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of various age group male and female who regularly involved in physical activity in the year 2010. lJ2K
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of various age group male and female who regularly involved in physical activity in the year 2010. It is clearly depicted from the figure that the number of male exceeded the number of male in daily physical work Turning to the detail in the age group 15 to 24 the percentage of male is higher than the percentage of female. Nonetheless in all the given age group female outnumbered male. The percentage of male in the age group 25 to 34 was 42. 2 while the women in the same group was 48. 9. The women in age group 45 to 54 were more than 50 percentage who regularly did physical activity. But for the case of men it was the age group 15 to 24 where there were more than fifty percent involvement in physical fitness. It is interesting to note that almost same number of male and female involved in physical activity in the age group 65 and over.
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15 to 24 the
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outnumbered male. The
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25 to 34 was 42. 2 while the women in the same
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was 48. 9.

The women in
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45 to 54 were more than 50
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15 to 24 where there were more than fifty percent involvement in
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fitness. It is interesting to note that almost same number of male and
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65 and over.

IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of various age group male and female who regularly involved in physical activity in the year 2010.

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6.0
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