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The given bar chart illustrates the number of Britishers who moved to different countries (Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, and France) from 2004 to 2007

The given bar chart illustrates the number of Britishers who moved to different countries (Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, and France) from 2004 to 2007 L3VPr
The given bar chart illustrates the number of Britishers who moved to different countries (Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, and France) from 2004 to 2007. Overall, British people emigrate mostly to Australia every year, followed by Spain. Spain has an equal number of British incomers every year alike New Zealand and the USA. Brits moved to France every year various. In Australia, 2006 was the year with the most intakers around 51 thousand, which was not only the highest among Australia but also highest of the remaining countries. 2004, 05, 07 has similar numbers for Australia. Overall, Spain has the same amount of people from 2004 to 2006 (around 34 thousand) and a drop in 2007 (28 thousand). In New Zealand, 22 thousand people are migrated from the United Kingdom in 2004. It slowly decreased by the following years. In the USA, 2004 and 2006 are the years with the constant amount of intake (22 thousand). Similarly, 2005 and 2007 has also the same amount with 20 thousand. France was the only country which has greater fluctuations across all the years, with most in 2005 and least in 2007.
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countries (Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, and France) from 2004 to 2007.

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emigrate
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, followed by Spain. Spain has an equal number of British incomers every
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alike New Zealand and the USA. Brits
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to France every
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various.

In Australia, 2006 was the
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with the most
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intakers
around 51 thousand, which was not
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the highest among Australia
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highest of the remaining countries. 2004, 05, 07 has similar numbers for Australia.
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, Spain has the same amount of
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people
from 2004 to 2006 (around 34 thousand) and a drop in 2007 (28 thousand).

In New Zealand, 22 thousand
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are migrated
from the United Kingdom in 2004. It
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decreased by the following years. In the USA, 2004 and 2006 are the years with the constant amount of intake (22 thousand).
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the same amount with 20 thousand. France was the
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country which has greater fluctuations across all the years, with most in 2005 and least in 2007.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the number of Britishers who moved to different countries (Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, and France) from 2004 to 2007

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