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The flowchart shows how fruit is canned

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The flow chart shows the canning process for fruit. There are fourteen stages in the fruit canning process from when the fresh fruit is picked to when the canned fruit is distributed. Most stages in the process are done by machine, althought the picking and quality control are done by hand. First the fruit is picked by hand and transported by truck to the cannery. In the cannery, first it is washed, then it is checked for quality and any bad or poor quality food is removed. Then, the fruit is stored at a cool temperature. Next the fruit is weighed and graded, then it is peeled, cored and sliced. After that, she sliced fruit is put into cans which are then sealed. The canned fruit is cooked and at this stage the cans are also sterilized. After cooking and sterilizing, the cans are labelled and the canned fruit is stored before being dispatched to distributors and other places to be sold.
The flow chart
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shows
the canning process for fruit.

There are fourteen stages in the
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fruit
canning process from when the fresh
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fruit
is picked
to when the canned
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fruit
is distributed
. Most stages in the process
are done
by machine,
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althought
the picking and quality control
are done
by hand.

First
the
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fruit
is picked
by hand and transported by truck to the cannery. In the cannery,
first
it
is washed
, then it is
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checked
for quality and any
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bad
or poor quality food
is removed
. Then, the
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fruit
is stored
at a cool temperature.
Next
the
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fruit
is weighed
and graded, then it
is peeled
, cored and sliced. After that, she sliced
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fruit
is put
into cans which are then sealed. The canned
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fruit
is cooked
and at this stage the cans are
also
sterilized. After cooking and sterilizing, the cans
are labelled
and the canned
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fruit
is stored
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before
being dispatched
to distributors and other places to
be sold
.

IELTS academic The flowchart shows how fruit is canned

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