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The figures below show the changes in the number of graduates in the UK and percentages of 5 groups of graduates working in different fields from 1992 to 2002.

The figures below show the changes in the number of graduates in the UK and percentages of 5 groups of graduates working in different fields from 1992 to 2002. lWkxD
The given charts illustrate the number of students who graduated from university in the UK and the rate of 5 clusters working in different fields between 1992 and 2002. Overall, the number of graduates had statistically significant fluctuations over 3 years. In addition, whilst Secretary and Sale jobs increased throughout 3 years, the others remain witnessed a downward trend. As can be observed from the line chart, in the 1992 year, the number of graduates started at 165 people. After it rose considerably by 25, 000 people in 1997, followed by the decline to 170, 000 people in 2002. According to the bar chart, the proportion of workers who worked in Secretary and Sales witnessed an upward trend over 3 years and culminated at 25 percent and 28 percent from 15% and one fifth, respectively. Meanwhile, that of the remain categories virtually decreased throughout 3 years, with Profession from 30 percent to 20 percent in 2002. As well as the others ended at the rate under 20 percent.
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different
fields between 1992 and 2002.

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, the number of graduates had
statistically
significant fluctuations over 3 years.
In addition
, whilst Secretary and Sale jobs increased throughout 3 years, the others remain witnessed a downward trend.

As can
be observed
from the line chart, in the 1992
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, the number of graduates
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started
at 165
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. After it rose
considerably
by 25, 000
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people
in 1997, followed by the decline to 170, 000
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people
in 2002.

According to the bar chart, the proportion of workers who worked in Secretary and Sales witnessed an upward trend over 3 years and culminated at 25
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percent
and 28
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percent
from 15% and one fifth,
respectively
. Meanwhile, that of
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the remain
categories
virtually
decreased throughout 3 years, with Profession from 30
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to 20
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in 2002.
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as the others ended at the rate under 20
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IELTS academic The figures below show the changes in the number of graduates in the UK and percentages of 5 groups of graduates working in different fields from 1992 to 2002.

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