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The Diagrams Below Show the Life Cycle of a Species of Large Fish Called the Salmon

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The diagrams illustrate a pattern in which a sort of large fish named salmon went by. Overall, the process consists of three stages, beginning with eggs hatch into fry and ending up with adult salmon travelling to upper rivers. In the first step, adult salmon ovelate eggs in the upper river where the water is moving slowly and lamb there under small stones covered by reeds. After approximtly 5 to 6 months, salmon eggs hatch to young fishes called fries of 3 to 8 cm. This fries travel to lower river in which the flux of water is fast and survive there for almost 4 years before becoming smolts consist of 12 to 15 cm. In the next stage, smolts change their place from lower river to open sea to survive there for 5 years and grow into adult salmons of 70 to 76 cm. Subsequently, this adults undergo the process of ovulationg eggs in the upper rivers again which make this process a king of a closed loop.
The diagrams illustrate a pattern in which a sort of large fish named salmon went by.
Overall
, the process consists of three stages, beginning with eggs hatch into fry and ending up with adult salmon travelling to upper
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rivers
. In the
first
step, adult salmon
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ovelate
eggs in the upper
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river
where the water is moving
slowly
and lamb there under
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small
stones covered by reeds. After
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approximtly
5 to 6 months, salmon eggs hatch to young fishes called fries of 3 to 8 cm.
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fries travel to lower
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river
in which the flux of water is
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fast
and survive there for almost 4 years
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before
becoming
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smolts
consist of 12 to 15 cm. In the
next
stage,
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smolts
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change
their place from lower
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river
to open sea to survive there for 5 years and grow into adult salmons of 70 to 76 cm.
Subsequently
,
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this
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adults
undergo the process of
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ovulationg
eggs in the upper
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rivers
again which
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make
this process a king of a closed loop.

IELTS academic The Diagrams Below Show the Life Cycle of a Species of Large Fish Called the Salmon

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