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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. eoKB
The pictures illustrate the changes, which have taken place at West Park secondary school from 1950 to 2010. Firstly, significant alterations occurred to the farmland, it was redesigned to a sports field in 1980 and then to a car park in 2010. There was an expansion of the car park in 2010 and the sport field was placed between the car park and the playground. Moreover, substantial changes happened to the houses. They were removed from the map, car park and science block taking their place. Furthermore, a science block was added to the school building in 1980 and playground was reduced in size. However, the locations of the playground and school were not modified. In contrast, the main road remained unchanged throughout the period. Overall, farmland and houses disappeared from the map, playground was abridged, and there were built science block, car park and sports field.
The pictures illustrate the
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changes
, which have taken place at West
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Park
secondary school from 1950 to 2010.

Firstly
, significant alterations occurred to the farmland, it
was redesigned
to a sports field in 1980 and then to a
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car
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park
in 2010. There was an expansion of the
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car
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park
in 2010 and the sport field
was placed
between the
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car
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park
and the playground.

Moreover
, substantial
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changes
happened to the
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houses
. They
were removed
from the map,
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car
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park
and science block taking their place.

Furthermore
, a science block was
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added
to the school building in 1980 and playground was
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reduced
in size.
However
, the locations of the playground and school were not modified.

In contrast
, the main road remained unchanged throughout the period.

Overall
, farmland and
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houses
disappeared from the map, playground
was abridged
, and there
were built
science block,
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car
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park
and sports field.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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6 paragraphs
147 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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