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The diagrams below are existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery.

The diagrams below are existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery. Q0Gb
The first picture shows the layout of an art gallery, and the second shows some proposed changes to the gallery space. It is clear that significant changes will be made in terms of the use of floor space in the gallery. There will be a completely new entrance and more space for exhibitions. At present, visitors enter the gallery through doors which lead into a lobby. However, the plan is to move the entrance to the Parkinson Court side of the building, and visitors will walk straight into the exhibition area. In place of the lobby and office areas, which are shown on the existing plan, the new gallery plan shows an education area and a small storage area. The permanent exhibition space in the redeveloped gallery will be about twice as large as it is now because it will occupy the area that is now used for temporary exhibitions. There will also be a new room for special exhibitions. This room is shown in red on the existing plan and is not currently part of the gallery.
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gallery
, and the second
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proposed
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space.

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changes
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in terms of the
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use
of floor space in the
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gallery
. There will be a completely new entrance and more space for exhibitions.

At present, visitors enter the
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gallery
through doors which lead into a lobby.
However
, the
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plan
is to
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move
the entrance to the Parkinson Court side of the building, and visitors will walk straight into the exhibition
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. In place of the lobby and office
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, which
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, the new
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an education
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storage area.

The permanent exhibition space in the redeveloped
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will be about twice as large as it is
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now
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for temporary exhibitions. There will
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room


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for
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IELTS academic The diagrams below are existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery.

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