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The bar chart shows the household owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

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The bar chart shows the household owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Overall, there is steadily increased of people owning homes, while the rented homes were recorded a dramatically decline of their numbers through the given period, it can be seen most of the families is likely to own their homes more than renting In 1918, there was high rates of rented houses from people with nearly 80%, but after that it was started to decreasing steadily to well under 70%. Between 1939 and 1953 their percentage were plateaued and then fell sharply to approximately above 30% by 2011. whereas, there noticeable feature in 1971, the proportion of both the owning and renting accommodation were recorded by 50 % each. On the other hand, although the families began from the low rates with well over 20 in 1918, but then it reached the peak with nearly 70% in 1991, then from 1991 to 2001 were similar percentage, and decreased to just over 60% by 2011.
The bar chart
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shows
the household owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall
, there is
steadily
increased of
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people
owning homes, while the rented homes
were recorded
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dramatically decline
of their numbers through the
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given
period, it can be
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seen
most of the families is likely to
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own
their homes more than renting

In 1918, there was high rates of rented
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houses
from
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people
with
nearly
80%,
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but
after that it was
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started
to decreasing
steadily
to well under 70%. Between 1939 and 1953 their percentage
were plateaued
and then fell
sharply
to approximately above 30% by 2011.
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whereas
, there noticeable feature in 1971, the proportion of both the owning and renting accommodation
were recorded
by 50 % each.

On the other hand
, although the families began from the low rates with well over 20 in 1918,
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but
then it reached the peak with
nearly
70% in 1991, then from 1991 to 2001 were similar percentage, and decreased to
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just
over 60% by 2011.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the household owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

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171 words
6.5
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