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The maps show improvements that have been made to a universiy campus between 2010 and the present day.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a universiy campus between 2010 and the present day. Q0xb
The maps below give information about the development of the university campus between our days and 2010. Overall the university campus has been developed a lot by adding some new buildings and demolishing some of the previous one. First of all, student accommodation that is located on the west of the map has been extended and developed by time. Despite the fact that a restaurant has been demolished nowadays, a new building with different student facilities, like shops and offices has been constructed at the place of previous student accommodation in the south. Noteworthy that the sitting area near the lake has been destroyed too, but the lake is still located in the center of the university campus. Furthermore university offices and teaching blocks in the north have been replaced by brand new art and science buildings.
The maps below give information about the development of the
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university
campus between our days and 2010.

Overall
the
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university
campus has
been developed
a lot by adding
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some
new buildings and demolishing
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some of the
previous one.

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First of all
, student accommodation that
is located
on the west of the map has
been extended
and developed by time. Despite the fact that a restaurant has
been demolished
nowadays, a new building with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
student facilities, like shops and offices has
been constructed
at the place of previous student accommodation in the south. Noteworthy that the sitting area near the lake has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
too,
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but
the lake is
still
located in the center of the
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university
campus.
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Furthermore
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university
offices and teaching blocks in the north have
been replaced
by
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
art and science buildings.
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IELTS academic The maps show improvements that have been made to a universiy campus between 2010 and the present day.

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3 paragraphs
137 words
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