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The diagram which illustrates processes of life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.

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The diagram which illustrates the processes of the life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon. The first step is that, the salmon start his life as a egg under the reeds approximately five to six months in an upper river with a slow movement. And then when they became a fry with measure between three and eight centimetres in length they are going to the lower river in a fast flowing approximately for 4 years. Subsequently the fry became smooth and with a 12-15cm in length they reach during this time after which migrated to the open sea and there they habited about five years. After five years they reached to the adult size it means adult salmon from 70 to 76cm. In conclusion, the salmon passed through three areas and the process of becoming mature. Each of habitat place takes place in different aquatic location.

The diagram which illustrates the processes of the life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.

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 flowing approximately for 4 years.

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Subsequently
 the fry became smooth and with a 12Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "-15 cm"-15 cm
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 in length they reach during this time after which migrated to the open sea and there they Possible spelling mistake found.
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After
 five years they reached to the adult size it means adult salmon from 70 to Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "76 cm"76 cm
76cm
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In conclusion
, the salmon passed through three areas and the process of becoming mature. Each of habitat place takes place in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
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 aquatic location. 

IELTS academic The diagram which illustrates processes of life cycle of a species of large fish named the salmon.

Academic

American English

4 paragraphs

150 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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