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The diagram shows the process of making cement and concrete.

The diagram shows the process of making cement and concrete. 5bDlm
The provided process illustrates the information about the distinct steps which are taken to make cement and concrete production. According to the presentation, initially, limestone and clay are crushed with the help of heavy roller to make powder and that powder is mixed into the mixer. Afterwards, after mixing powder it passes through pipe and rotate in the heater. The resulting mixture is placed onto the grinder to assemble fine cement powder. At last, the product is ready and packed into the bags. As can be seen from the concrete production, firstly, to make concrete four raw materials are needed such as cement (15%), water (10%), sand (25%) and small stone (50%). Subsequently, all these ingredients are poured into concrete mixture and rotate to produce final mixture of concrete for building purposes. Overall, the process of cement and concrete is a complex which passes through various stages before the material is ready to be used.
The provided process illustrates the information about the distinct steps which
are taken
to
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make
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cement
and concrete production.

According to the presentation,
initially
, limestone and clay
are crushed
with the
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help
of heavy roller to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
powder
and that
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powder
is mixed
into the mixer. Afterwards, after mixing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
powder
it passes through pipe and rotate in the heater. The resulting mixture
is placed
onto the grinder to assemble fine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
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powder
. At last, the product is ready and packed into the bags.

As can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
from the concrete production,
firstly
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
concrete four raw materials
are needed
such as
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cement
(15%), water (10%), sand (25%) and
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small
stone (50%).
Subsequently
, all these ingredients
are poured
into concrete mixture and rotate to produce final mixture of concrete for building purposes.
Overall
, the process of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
and concrete is a complex which passes through various stages
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before
the material is ready to be
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used
.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the process of making cement and concrete.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
155 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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