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The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information.

The given picture illustrates the process of enrollment to university of students after completing high school. Overall, it is evident that this procedure has numerous stages with a complication. It begins with high school graduates and it finals at the step of entering university. In the first place, people need to obtain High School degee and completing Application Form, which is downloaded from website, is nescessary for sending to Admin. Following step, it is divided to three outcomes that are able to go to final step. In Provisional Acceptance stage, after around two weeks the Administator would send you a letter asking for a number of more documents and personal information. Subsequently this compile Documentation is sent back to Admin. In another case, If the below form is rejected by admin, people would cancel application or completing other form for alternative course to sending to Admin once more. In third consequence, after a fortnight, administator would accepted compete enrollment and then subjects are selected after registering with Dean, who is high school's director. Finally, students are accepted to enter university.
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picture illustrates the process of enrollment to university of students after completing
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high
school.
Overall
, it is evident that this procedure has numerous stages with a complication. It
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begins
with
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high
school graduates and it finals at the step of entering university. In the
first
place,
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people
need to obtain
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High
School degee and completing Application Form, which
is downloaded
from website, is nescessary for sending to Admin. Following step, it
is divided
to three outcomes that are able to go to final step. In Provisional Acceptance stage, after around two weeks the Administator would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
you a letter asking for a number of more documents and personal information.
Subsequently
this compile Documentation is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
back to Admin. In another case, If the below form
is rejected
by admin,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would cancel application or completing other form for alternative course to sending to Admin once more. In third consequence, after a fortnight, administator would
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accepted
compete enrollment and then subjects
are selected
after registering with Dean, who is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
school's director.
Finally
, students are
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accepted
to enter university.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information.

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1 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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