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The diagram shows the changes take place in the West park its construct in 1950.

The diagram shows the changes take place in the West park its construct in 1950. obM3B
The given pictures outline the alteration take place in layout of West park secondary school from 1950 to 2010. In 1995, there were three houses constructed in the left side of school, while it was converted into a car park and size block in 1980. Moving further, there was formed and warehouse in 1950, where as it was made into sports field in 1980. However, playground and school was remained unchanged in next 3 decades. Furthermore, car park has enlarged by added sports field in it during 2010, although some part of play ground was established into sport field and with this the area of playground was reduced. After constructing car and science block no place remained for houses in 1990. The main road was not change into given time period. Overall, during 60 years school introduce educational as well as car parking facility.
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pictures outline the alteration take place in layout of West park secondary
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school
from 1950 to 2010.

In 1995, there were three
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houses
constructed in the
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left
side of
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school
, while it
was converted
into a
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car
park and size block in 1980. Moving
further
, there
was formed
and warehouse in 1950,
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where as
it
was made
into sports field in 1980.
However
, playground and
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school
was remained
unchanged in
next
3 decades.

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,
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car
park has enlarged by
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added
sports field in it during 2010, although
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some
part of play ground
was established
into sport field and with this the area of playground was
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reduced
. After constructing
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car
and science block no place remained for
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houses
in 1990. The main road was not
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change
into
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given
time period.
Overall
, during 60 years
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school
introduce educational
as well
as
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car
parking facility.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the changes take place in the West park its construct in 1950.

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