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The diagram provided offers valuable information into the procedure by which bricks are made.

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The diagram provided offers valuable information into the procedure by which bricks are made. In general, the diagram has over 5 phases, commencing with digging clay and culminating in delivery it to various places of consumption. To begin with, workers operate a digger to collect clay. After that, clay is put on metal grid to sort all impurities in order to collect sand and then, sand drop to roller. Following this, water is added to mix with sand, after which the mixture of sand and water is moulded or delivered to wire cutter and bricks are formed afterwards. At this point, they are put into drying oven in 24 – 48 hours. After becoming dried, they are heated in kiln from 200 to 1300 degrees and then, they will be cooled 48 to 72 hours in cooling chamber. Once they are ready, bricks are packed. The last step is that sending bricks to numerous places of consumption.
The diagram provided offers valuable information into the procedure by which bricks

are made
.

In general
, the diagram has over 5 phases, commencing with digging clay and

culminating in delivery it to various places of consumption.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, workers operate a digger to collect clay. After that, clay
is put
on metal

grid to sort all impurities in order to collect
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sand
and then,
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sand
drop to roller. Following

this, water is
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added
to mix with
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sand
, after which the mixture of
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sand
and water is

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moulded
or delivered to wire cutter and bricks
are formed
afterwards. At this point,

they
are put
into drying oven in 24 – 48 hours. After becoming dried, they
are heated
in

kiln from 200 to 1300 degrees and then, they will
be cooled
48 to 72 hours in cooling

chamber. Once they are ready, bricks
are packed
. The last step is that sending bricks to

numerous places of consumption.
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