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The diagram illustrates how carbonated drinks are produced.

The diagram illustrates how carbonated drinks are produced. 1A67L

The diagram illustrates how carbonated drinks are produced. Overall, the whole process consists of five primary stages, beginning with clarifying raw water and ending with dispatching to consumers. The first step is purifying water from different origins. The impure water is filtered through an automatic system before being softened and added with additives. Then, the solved water is transported through a pump and it is time for the next step, boiling and carbonation. This liquid is let to go through electric heaters and a cooling pipe respectively to transform into the most suitable form, which is blended with carbon dioxide. After a carbondinating term, the compound is put into a mixing machine with colouring, syrup, flavour to create various types of soft drinks. At the completed step, carbonated water is either filled in bottle or canned. Finally, bottles and cans are wrapped into each box and deliveried to places of consumption.

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. Overall
, the whole process consists of five primary stages, beginning with clarifying raw You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 and ending with dispatching to consumers.

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 step is purifying You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 from This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 origins. The impure You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
is filtered
 through an automatic system This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
being softened
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 with additives. Then, the solved You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
is transported
 through a pump and it is time for the next
 step, boiling and carbonation. This liquid is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 to go through electric heaters and a cooling pipe respectively
 to transform into the most suitable form, which is blended
 with carbon dioxide. After a Possible spelling mistake found.carbonating
carbondinating
 term, the compound is put
 into a mixing machine with Possible spelling mistake found.coloringco louring
colouring
, syrup, Possible spelling mistake. 'flavour' is British English.flavor
flavour
 to create various types of soft drinks. At the completed step, carbonated You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdrinkrain
water
 is either filled in bottle or canned. Finally
, bottles and cans are wrapped
 into each box and Possible spelling mistake found.delivereddeliveries
deliveried
 to places of consumption. 

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how carbonated drinks are produced.

Academic

American English

2 paragraphs

151 words

5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

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