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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagram illustrates the seven-step process of the production of honey by bees. Firstly, bees live in a hexagonal container known as Hive. To begin the honey production process, bees have to first search for a suitable flower that will produce a sweet liquid called nectar. The bees sap the flower nectar and carefully deposit it in the cells of the hive. The next step in the production process is for the bees to fan their wings to cause the water in the nectar to evaporate, forming honey. in the final stage of the process, this honey can then be collected into jars. Overall, it is clear that the production of honey is a multi-step systematic process carried out by honeybees starting from.
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of honey by bees.

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in a hexagonal container known as Hive. To
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the honey
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, bees
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search for a suitable flower that will produce a sweet liquid called nectar. The bees sap the flower nectar and
carefully
deposit it in the cells of the hive. The
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is for the bees to fan their wings to cause the water in the nectar to evaporate, forming honey.
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, this honey can then
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, it is
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of honey is a multi-step systematic
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carried out by honeybees starting from.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
124 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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