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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. ngAR
The diagram below gives information about the structure of the production line of the honey that is made by bees. As per the diagram, it is clear that the referred production line is contemplated by 7 (seven) phases, from the moment the bees constructed its hives to when the final product goes through packaging for sale. As a manner of explanation, a hive is a container where bees live. We learn from the referred diagram that the first phase starts with the construction of hives by the bees. Right after, the bees fly around looking for nectar, which is a sweet liquid produced by flowers. Then, as soon as the bees find nectar, the bees return to its hives in order to storage it with the purpose to initiate the water evaporation process. The last but one phase of the production line is the packing process of the honey inside specific bottles.
The diagram below gives information about the structure of the production line of the honey that
is made
by bees.

As per the diagram, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the referred production line
is contemplated
by 7 (seven) phases, from the moment the bees constructed its hives to when the final product goes through packaging for sale. As a manner of explanation, a hive is a container where bees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.

We learn from the referred diagram that the
first
phase
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
with the construction of hives by the bees. Right after, the bees
fly
around looking for nectar, which is a sweet liquid produced by flowers. Then, as
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soon
as the bees find nectar, the bees return to its hives in order to storage it with the purpose to initiate the water evaporation process.

The last
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but
one phase of the production line is the packing process of the honey inside specific bottles.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
152 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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