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the diagram illustrate cement and concrete production

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The provided diagrams apparently illustrate the multistep process of the cement and concrete production. The first diagram demonstrates how the raw limestone and clay are processed into ready to use cement. First step is crushing and mixing, then the mixed powder is sent into a special rotating tube wich is heated up from the bottom with the naked flame. After having been warmed up the substance is grinned into a sand looking black colored product. Finally the cement is packed into individual bags. The next diagram shows how the concrete is produced. In order to make concrete you are required to mix four key ingredients in a special mixing device, those are gravel, cement, sand and water. Gravel predominates in the mixture accounting for 50%, following by sand, at 25%. Water and cement constitute 15% and 10% respectively. Overall, the diagram shows a process of turning raw materials into concrete with the use of heat, supplementing materials and rotation at both stages.

The provided diagrams apparently
 illustrate the multistep process of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
 and concrete production.

The first
 diagram demonstrates how the raw limestone and clay are processed
 into ready to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
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cement
. First
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sent
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is heated
 up from the bottom with the naked flame. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
 having been warmed
 up the substance is grinned
 into a sand looking black colored product. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Finally,
Finally
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
is packed
 into individual bags.

The next
 diagram This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 how the concrete is produced
. In order to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 concrete you are required
 to mix four key ingredients in a special mixing device, those are gravel, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
, sand and water. Gravel predominates in the mixture accounting for 50%, following by sand, at 25%. Water and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
 constitute 15% and 10% respectively
.

Overall
, the diagram This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 a process of turning raw materials into concrete with the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 of heat, supplementing materials and rotation at both stages. 