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The diagram represents the construction of a public park, which opens in the year 1920, and the reconstruction of the same park nowadays. The main features are some changes in the reconstruction of the park.

The diagram represents the construction of a public park, which opens in the year 1920, and the reconstruction of the same park nowadays. The main features are some changes in the reconstruction of the park. 731b5
The diagram represents the construction of a public park, which opens in the year 1920, and the reconstruction of the same park nowadays. The main features are some changes in the reconstruction of the park. In the year 1920, Grange Park Arnold Avenue has two Entrance Gates which were built in the North and South direction. On the East side of the park, there was a Pond which is built for watering the plants and a few seats were manufactured. In the North-East there was a Rose Garden. And in the South-East there was a Glass House. In the center of the park, there was a Fountain. In the middle of the West-side there was a Stage for musicians, in the West-East and West-South there was a Seating Area and Rose Garden was constructed. Whereas, at present, the structure of the park is changed, in all directions of the park. In the middle of the park, the Fountain is replaced by the Rose Garden and around Rose Garden, Seats were stabilized. On the West side of the park, Amphitheater is constructed for Concerts. In the North-West there is another Rose Garden which is built. In the North-East, A Cafe and Children's Play Area are rebuilt to demolish the Rose Garden and Water pond for plants, in the South-East there is a Water Feature and on the Right-side of the Water Feature, there is an Entrance Underground Car Park.
The diagram represents the construction of a public
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park
, which opens in the year 1920, and the reconstruction of the same
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park
nowadays. The main features are
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some
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changes
in the reconstruction of the park.

In the year 1920, Grange
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Park
Arnold Avenue has two Entrance Gates which
were built
in the North and South direction. On the East side of the
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park
, there was a Pond which
is built
for watering the plants and a few seats
were manufactured
. In the North-East there was a
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Rose
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Garden
. And in the South-East there was a Glass
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House
. In the center of the
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park
, there was a Fountain. In the middle of the West-side there was a Stage for musicians, in the West-East and West-South there was a Seating Area and
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Rose
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Garden
was constructed
.

Whereas, at present, the structure of the
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park
is
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changed
, in all directions of the
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park
. In the middle of the
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park
, the Fountain
is replaced
by the
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Rose
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Garden
and around
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Rose
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Garden
, Seats
were stabilized
. On the West side of the
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park
, Amphitheater
is constructed
for Concerts. In the North-West there is another
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Rose
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Garden
which
is built
. In the North-East, A
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Cafe
and Children's Play Area are rebuilt to demolish the
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Rose
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Garden
and Water pond for plants, in the South-East there is a Water Feature and on the Right-side of the Water Feature, there is an Entrance Underground Car
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Park
.
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IELTS academic The diagram represents the construction of a public park, which opens in the year 1920, and the reconstruction of the same park nowadays. The main features are some changes in the reconstruction of the park.

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