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The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States.

The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. LrwwK
The diagram illustrates the food manufacturing chain in United State of America. At a glance, it is evident that the food obatined by populace goes through several stages prior to being served on the plates. Initially, various items are gathered from different places such as fish from sea sides and meat, milk, chicken and eggs are brought from countryside. After that, they are moved towards the processing stage where they are cleaned and packed. Subsequently, they have been sent to the distribution sector where they are sent throughout the country by means of different modes of transportation. Moving ahead, as the food products reach the local stores, these eatables are bought by domestic individuals for homes and restaurants. Last but not the least, the food items bought are utilized for home and restaurant dishes which are further served to the family members along with customers. Hence, the process repeats everyday as the food ais the basic need of our day to day life.
The diagram illustrates the
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food
manufacturing chain in United State of America.

At a glance, it is evident that the
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food
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obatined
by populace goes through several stages prior to
being served
on the plates.

Initially
, various items
are gathered
from
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different
places such as fish from sea sides and meat, milk, chicken and eggs
are brought
from countryside. After that, they are
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moved
towards the processing stage where they
are cleaned
and packed.
Subsequently
, they have been
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sent
to the distribution sector where they are
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sent
throughout the country by means of
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different
modes of transportation.

Moving ahead, as the
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food
products reach the local stores, these eatables are
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bought
by domestic individuals for homes and restaurants. Last
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but
not the least, the
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food
items
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bought
are utilized
for home and restaurant dishes which are
further
served to the family members along with customers.
Hence
, the process repeats
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everyday
as the
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food
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ais
the basic need of our
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day to day
life.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States.

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6.0
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