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The diagram below shows the results of a questionnaire showing how many times teenagers in Australia use an iPod in a week to play videos in 2009.

The diagram below shows the results of a questionnaire showing how many times teenagers in Australia use an iPod in a week to play videos in 2009. KRa0
The pie chart compares and contrasts data on the differences in the percentage of time Australian teenagers played videos on an iPod a week in the year 2009. It can be seen clearly from the graph that the number of the teenagers surveyed did not use an iPod as a means to play videos represents the largest portion. On the other hand, spending 6 to 10 times per week using an iPod for watching videos was the category receiving the smallest proportion. More specifically, over a half of all respondents did not play videos on an iPod in the year 2009. Meanwhile, spending twice a week to use an iPod for the purpose of playing videos made up a negligible 15%. While a minority of Australian teenagers used the iPod once a week, at 14%, users played videos on the iPod at 3 to 5 times and over 11 times weekly were at only 9% and 6% respectively, which were significantly lower than the others. However, it is noticeable that the smallest proportion of 5% caused by 6 to 10 times per week in the year 2009.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the results of a questionnaire showing how many times teenagers in Australia use an iPod in a week to play videos in 2009.

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