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The diagram below shows the results of a questionnaire showing how many times teenagers in Australia use an iPod in a week to play videos in 2009.

The diagram below shows the results of a questionnaire showing how many times teenagers in Australia use an iPod in a week to play videos in 2009. mNa8
This pie chart shows the shares of total world food consumption held by each of seven different food types in 2014. Meat is consumed the most, at 31. 4 percent. Fish has the second highest consumption levels, at 27. 9 percent. Cereals consumption represents 11. 7 percent of the total. Fruits’ share of consumption is 10. 6 percent, followed closely by vegetables at 10. 5 percent, and then bread at 5. 5 percent. The smallest food group in terms of world consumption is rice, at 2. 4 percent. The graphs shows that overall global consumption is widely dispersed among food types; no one type has a majority share. Animal-based foods (meat and fish) do make up the majority of consumption when added together. It is important to note, however, that based on the information in this pie chart no conclusions can be drawn about the dietary diversity of an individual person.
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levels, at 27. 9
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. Cereals
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represents 11. 7
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of the total. Fruits’ share of
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the results of a questionnaire showing how many times teenagers in Australia use an iPod in a week to play videos in 2009.

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