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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. D9em
The bar graph illustrated above provide data about the sex ratio of students according to 100 boys admitted in different strata of education system. The division is according to status of countries, i. e, whether they are developing countries or a developed countries. Addition to this the graph also depict about rise in population of girls and boys in two different year with the target which was planned to be achevied. Furthermore, the data of primary education shows slightly less rise in sex ratio in camparrision with developed contries, the similar approach is followed by secondary education as well. Instead to this tertiary education shows relatively more difference of sex ratio between the countries. However, the higgest surge can be seen in 1998 in tertiary education in developed countries with respect to girls population over boys, i. e, 112 which is beyond the target line and that's of 1990 is 105. Additionally, secondary and primary education as well shows variant results. The least growth in sex ratio is obsereved in tertiary education in year 1990, i. e, 66 in developing countries. While primary education fails to acheive the target line. Meanwhile, the secondary education illustrate somewhat intermediate result and nearly succeeded in acheiveing target in 1998.
The bar graph illustrated above provide data about the
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sex
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of students according to 100 boys admitted in
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different
strata of
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education
system. The division is according to status of
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countries
, i. e, whether they are developing
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countries
or a developed
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countries
. Addition to this the graph
also
depict about rise in population of girls and boys in two
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different
year with the
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target
which
was planned
to be
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achevied
.

Furthermore
, the data of primary
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education
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shows
slightly
less rise in
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sex
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ratio
in
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camparrision
with developed
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contries
, the similar approach
is followed
by secondary
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education
as well
.
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Instead
to this tertiary
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education
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shows
relatively
more difference of
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sex
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ratio
between the countries.

However
, the
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higgest
surge can be
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seen
in 1998 in tertiary
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education
in developed
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countries
with respect to girls population over boys, i. e, 112 which is beyond the
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target
line and that's of 1990 is 105.
Additionally
, secondary and primary
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education
as well
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shows
variant results. The least growth in
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sex
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ratio
is
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obsereved
in tertiary
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education
in year 1990, i. e, 66 in developing
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countries
.
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While
primary
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education
fails to
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acheive
the
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target
line.

Meanwhile, the secondary
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education
illustrate somewhat intermediate result and
nearly
succeeded in
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acheiveing
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target
in 1998.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education.

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206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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