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The diagram below shows the process of how fruits is canned. is

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The provider process illustrates the information about the various steps which are taken to can the fruit. Overall, the process of pears is a complex which passes through the various steps before the fruit is canned to be used. According to the diagram, firstly, the pears are picking by the hand of farmers and then it transported by the law is to industries. As well as, it waches and then check the quality of tools. After this whole process it stores in cold places. Secondly, weighing of pears and start peeling it and then slicing it and put it into cans. Furthermore, after Canning it is ready for sealing the cans. Moreover, it is cooking and sterilizing on the fire and it starts for labelling on the boxes. After whole process, it store into big boxes and then ready for dispatch.
The provider
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illustrates the information about the various steps which
are taken
to can the fruit.

Overall
, the
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process
of pears is a complex which passes through the various steps
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before
the fruit
is canned
to be
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used
.

According to the diagram,
firstly
, the pears are picking by the hand of farmers and then it transported by the law is to industries.
As well
as, it
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waches
and then
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check
the quality of tools.
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After
this whole
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it stores in
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cold
places.
Secondly
, weighing of pears and
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start
peeling it and then slicing it and put it into cans.

Furthermore
, after Canning it is ready for sealing the cans.
Moreover
, it is cooking and sterilizing on the fire and it
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starts
for labelling on the boxes. After whole
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, it
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store
into
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big
boxes and then ready for dispatch.

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process of how fruits is canned. is

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