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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. yXP0E
The process by which brick manufacturing bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which lies just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger. Then the lumps of clay are placed on a metal grid, in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller ones, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick shaped pieces by mean of a wire cutter. These fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then tranferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature even. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200-980°C, then at a high temperature of 870-1300°C. This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber. Once the bricks have cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.
The process by which
brick
manufacturing
bricks
are manufactured
for the building industry can
be outlined
in seven consecutive steps.
First
the raw material,
clay
, which lies
just
below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas
has to
be dug
up by a digger.

Then the lumps of
clay
are placed
on a metal grid, in order to break up the
big
chunks of
clay
into much smaller ones, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion
further
segregates the bits of
clay
. Sand and water are
added
to
make
a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in
moulds
or
cut
into
brick
shaped pieces by mean of a wire cutter.

These fresh
bricks
are then
kept
in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of
bricks
at a time. The dried
bricks
are then
tranferred
to a
so
-called kiln, another type of high temperature even.
First
they are
kept
at a moderate temperature of 200
-980°C
, then at a high temperature of 870
-1300°C
. This process
is followed
by cooling down the finished
bricks
for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber.

Once the
bricks
have cooled down and have become
hard
, they
get
packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.
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