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The diagram below shows Sugar cane process

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The diagram displays how sugar is manufactured from sugar cane. Overall, it is a linear process consisting of four main stages: farming, crushing, separating and drying. The first step is to grow sugar cane and it takes about 12 to 18 months for it to mature. After it has fully grown, it is harvested either manually or mechanically. The manual method involves farmers removing the leaves first and then chopping the canes, while the mechanized method uses machines to cut the canes directly. The harvested canes are then crushed in a mill to extract the juice, which later on is purified using a limestone filter. Next, the purified juice is boiled in an evaporator to remove water, which concentrates it into a syrup. The syrup is then poured into a centrifuge where it is spun at high speed to separate sugar crystals from it. Finally, the crystals are dried and cooled and the end product is sugar.

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Overall
, it is a linear process consisting of four main stages: farming, crushing, separating and drying.

The first
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sugar
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cane
 and it takes about 12 to 18 months for it to mature. After it has fully
 grown, it is harvested
 either manually
 or mechanically
. The manual method involves farmers removing the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departs
leaves
first
 and then chopping the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwalking stickpolerod
canes
, while the mechanized method This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploits
uses
 machines to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwalking stickpolerod
canes
directly
.

The harvested You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwalking stickpolerod
canes
 are then crushed in a mill to extract the juice, which later on is purified
 using a limestone filter. Next
, the purified juice is boiled
 in an evaporator to remove water, which concentrates it into a syrup. The syrup is then poured into a centrifuge where it is spun
 at high speed to separate You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcarbohydrate
sugar
 crystals from it. Finally
, the crystals are dried
 and cooled and the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 product is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcarbohydrate
sugar
. 

IELTS academic The diagram below shows Sugar cane process

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American English

4 paragraphs

157 words

6.0

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