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The diagram below show the percentage of businesses in the UK who had social media presence from 2012 to 2016

The diagram below show the percentage of businesses in the UK who had social media presence from 2012 to 2016 qaWO5
The yielded bar charts demonstrate the social media presence business percentage in the UK between 2012 and 2016. Overall, it can be clearly seen that large businesses proportion was higher while small had the least throughout the period. For small businesses, roughly a third percentage of businesses had a presence for four continuous years which rose one-fifth percentage in 2016. For medium businesses, in 2012, 30% of the proportion was in these businesses, after that couple of years had the same percentage as the small businesses had in 2016. However, in 2016, it had 52%, which was the zenith, between the time it touched its dip point 29%. Large businesses had the highest percentage in 2012 on account of 78%, which remained unchanged for 3 years. In 2015 it dropped, and the proportion was the same as small and medium businesses had in 2016, although, after a year, it became 79%.
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, roughly a third
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of
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in 2016.

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, in 2012, 30% of the proportion was in these
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, after that couple of years had the same
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as the
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small
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businesses
had in 2016.
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had the highest
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in 2012 on account of 78%, which remained unchanged for 3 years. In
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dropped, and the proportion was the same as
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and medium
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had in 2016, although, after a
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, it became 79%.

IELTS academic The diagram below show the percentage of businesses in the UK who had social media presence from 2012 to 2016

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