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The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. KKa1
The  diagram illustrate the life span of the salmon and their life in three stages: upper river, lower river and open sea. In initial stage, under the upper river which moves slowly,   the salmon eggs leids between small stones and reeds. The eggs takes approximately 5-6 months to hatch these eggs, which called ' fry ' and there size around around 3-8 cm in length. After that, the frys moving to fast flowing lower river area, where they spend around 4 years and grow to 12 -15 cm with naming of the baby fish called 'smolt'. In final stage, the smolt travelling to open sea area, where they lived approx  5 years. when there growth around five time bigger than the smolt, which is called 'adult salmon '. The adult salmon strong enough to give birth and process started with beginning. The large fish called salmon takes 10 years journey to become a fish and process start to beginning
The
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diagram
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illustrate
the life span of the salmon and their life in three stages: upper
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river
, lower
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river
and open sea.

In initial stage, under the upper
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river
which
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moves
slowly
,
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the salmon eggs
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leids
between
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small
stones and reeds. The eggs
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takes
approximately 5-6 months to hatch these eggs, which called
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fry
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'
and there size
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around
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3-8 cm in length.

After that, the
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frys
moving to
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fast
flowing lower
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river
area, where they spend
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around
4 years and grow to 12 -15 cm with naming of the baby fish called '
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smolt
'.

In final stage, the
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smolt
travelling to open sea area, where they
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lived
approx
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5 years.
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when
there growth
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around
five time bigger than the
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smolt
, which
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'adult salmon '. The adult salmon strong
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enough
to give birth and process
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started
with beginning. The large fish called salmon takes 10 years journey to become a fish and process
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start
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beginning
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IELTS academic The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

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6.0
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