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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. 6x628
The two pie charts illustrate how different categories contributed to the expenditure of urban Chinese people percentagewise in the years 1995 and 2011. Overall, at the beginning of the period food sector was most significant expenditure, whereas medicine and others were the least significant expense. In comparison, at the end of the period food remained significantly large and the lowest contribution was made by others category. Medicine expense accounted for 3% of urban consumption in 1995, and became more than double, at 7% in 2011. Expense from the transportation category was 5% in 1995, which experienced approximately threefold increase to 14% in 2011. Spending on Recreation was 10% in 1995 and a slight growth of 2% in 2011. At the beginning of the period residential and others category made up 8% and 3% of urban consumption respectively, and these figures had slight growth of 1% in 2011. Food sector that comprised of half of urban Chinese consumption in 1995, fell to 36% in 2011. In 1995 expenses made out from clothing category was 14% and decreased to 11% in 2011. However, spending on household facilities remained constant in both the years at 7%.
The two pie charts illustrate how
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categories
contributed to the expenditure of
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urban
Chinese
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people
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percentagewise
in the years 1995 and 2011.

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, at the beginning of the period food sector was
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most
significant expenditure, whereas medicine
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and others
were the least significant
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expense
.
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, at the
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end
of the period food remained
significantly
large and the lowest contribution
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others
category.

Medicine
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expense
accounted for 3% of
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urban
consumption in 1995, and became more than double, at 7% in 2011.
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Expense
from the transportation
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category
was 5% in 1995, which experienced approximately threefold increase to 14% in 2011. Spending on Recreation was 10% in 1995 and a slight growth of 2% in 2011. At the beginning of the period residential
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and others
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category
made up 8% and 3% of
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urban
consumption
respectively
, and these figures had slight growth of 1% in 2011.

Food sector that comprised of half of
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urban
Chinese consumption in 1995, fell to 36% in 2011. In 1995 expenses made out from clothing
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category
was 14% and decreased to 11% in 2011.
However
, spending on household facilities remained constant in both the years at 7%.
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