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the degree granted in four different major at the National University in three decades is different a lot. Do you agree with this statement?

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The given pie charts illustrate a comparision of the degrees granted in four different majors at the National University in three decades, starting from 1990. Overall, it can be clearly observed that the Computer Science degrees had a upward trend, while there was a significant decrease of students granted from the Business during the provided time. In 1990, the Computer Science and Business field reached the highest rate of graduate students with 30% for each. At the same time, the proportion of the Medicine was the second biggest figure at 25%. And 15% was the Law. In the following years, the Computer Science degrees went up steadily with 40% in 2000 and 45% in 2010. The number of the Business degree was a half of the Computer Science in 2000. Them the Computer Science was three times than the Business after 10 years. The Medicine awarded degrees increased by 5% in 2000 but again went back to 25% in 2010. However, the percentage of graduated degrees in the Law was the lowest with 10% in 2000 and climbed by 5% after 10 years.
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