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The contrubution of various economic sector in Xcountry of GDP IN 2016,2017 and 2018

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The table char illustrates information of three different economic sectors( agriculture, industry and service) in Xcountry and percentage of contribution to GDP from 2016 to 2018. In 2016, agriculture sector contribute 13% of proportion to gross domestic product while, this number fell off and reached to 11% in 2017. But, in 2018 farming sector showed a slow growth of 15 %. Looking forward to industry sector it represents 22% in 2016 moreover it showed an improvement of GDP in 2017 and 2018 came at 25% and 30% respectively. Service sector was at peak in 2016 at 65% however with the passage of time number decline dramatically by 10 % in 2018(55%). Overall, it can be seen that service sector out raced others with every given years, although it showed a downward trend also. Whereas, industry sector rose up slightly in percentage of gross domestic product.
The table char illustrates information of three
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agriculture, industry and service) in
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Xcountry
and percentage of contribution to GDP from 2016 to 2018.

In 2016, agriculture
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sector
contribute 13% of proportion to gross domestic product while, this number fell off and reached to 11% in 2017.
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But
, in 2018 farming
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sector
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showed
a slow growth of 15 %.

Looking forward to industry
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it represents 22% in 2016
moreover
it
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showed
an improvement of GDP in 2017 and 2018 came at 25% and 30%
respectively
. Service
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sector
was at peak in 2016 at 65%
however
with the passage of time number decline
dramatically
by 10 % in 2018(55%).

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that service
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sector
out raced others with every
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given
years, although it
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showed
a downward trend
also
.
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, industry
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sector
rose up
slightly
in percentage of gross domestic product.
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