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Female unemployment rate in UK in 2013 and 2014

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The bar graph shows the unemployment rate among women in the four different countries of United Kingdom during the years 2013 and 2014. In 2013, 5. 6% women were recorded to be unemployed in Northern Ireland. The only country with a smaller percentage of unemployed women was Wales accounting for 5. 4%. The unemployment rate gradually decreased in both the countries in 2014. In Northern Ireland the percentage was 4. 6% and in Wales it was 5. 0%. England had the greatest unemployment rate with recording upto 6. 8% in 2013. However, it decreased to 6. 5% in 2014. On the other hand, Scotland had an increase of unemployment rate. In 2013 it recorded 6. 1% where as, in 2014 it recorded 6. 7%, making it with the highest percentage of unemployed women.
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IELTS academic Female unemployment rate in UK in 2013 and 2014

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