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The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the weight assessment of residents in Charlestown in 1995 and in 2015. Overall, comparing two years there are significant differentiation in overweight and underweight health issues. It is clear that there has been increase in overweight in the number of people whereas, there are general drop in underweight people between in 1995 and in 2015. In 2015, youngest group age had the fewest number of health issues, which is approximately 70 percent of 20-29 years people being assessed as a ideal weight. In that years, overweight is mainly problem for only 40-49 age groups. In contrast, being underweight is more observed issue among elderly people who were their 60s. However, in 2015 there was a steady increase in obesity almost in every age group. Vast majority of people is consider as a unhealthy weight and age of 60 nearly 60% of people diagnosed as a obese. Also, being in a health weight is in almost similiar ratio people who are the youngest age between these years
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assessment of residents in Charlestown in 1995 and in 2015.
Overall
, comparing two years there are significant differentiation in overweight and underweight health issues. It is
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clear
that there has been increase in overweight in the number of
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people
whereas, there are general
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in underweight
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between in 1995 and in 2015. In 2015,
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group
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had the fewest number of health issues, which is approximately 70 percent of 20-29 years
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people
being assessed
as
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ideal
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. In that years, overweight is
mainly
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contrast, being underweight is more observed issue among elderly
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who were their 60s.
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, in 2015 there was a steady increase in obesity almost in every
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age
group. Vast majority of
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people
is consider as
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a
unhealthy
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of 60
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diagnosed as
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a obese
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is in almost
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who are the youngest
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between these years
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IELTS academic The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.

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5.5
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