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The charts show the number of visitors and their satisfaction with Ashdown Museum

The charts show the number of visitors and their satisfaction with Ashdown Museum keQ68
The charts illustrate the total quantity of visitors as well as their satisfaction levels regarding the facilities of Ashdown Museum prior to and following improvements. Overall, it can be seen that the number of visitors increased after the museum had been refurbished. Moreover, the level of satisfaction rose significantly as three out of four visitors rated the museum very satisfactory or satisfactory in the survey. Prior to refurbishment, 74, 000 paid a visit to Ashdown Museum in a year and this number grew by 18, 000 the year after it had been refurbished. With regards to the outcomes of the survey, before refurbishment, less than half the visitors gave positive ratings to the facilities in the museum. In fact, only 15% were very satisfied and 30% were just satisfied. However, after the improvements had been done, more than a third of visitors gave the museum a “very satisfied” rating, while those who felt satisfied made up 40%. In contrast, in the year before the refurbishment, two fifths of the people who took part in the survey were dissatisfied, but this figure dipped to 15% only. Those who were very dissatisfied also halved in proportion (5%). In both years 5% of the visitors gave no response.
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as their satisfaction levels regarding the facilities of
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Ashdown
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Museum
prior to and following improvements.

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that the number of
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visitors
increased after the
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museum
had
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.
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, the level of satisfaction rose
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visitors
rated the
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museum
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very
satisfactory or satisfactory in the survey.

Prior to refurbishment, 74, 000 paid a visit to
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Ashdown
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Museum
in a
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year
and this number grew by 18, 000 the
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year
after it had
been refurbished
.

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the outcomes of the survey,
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before
refurbishment, less than half the
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visitors
gave
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positive
ratings to the facilities in the
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museum
. In fact,
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only
15% were
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very
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satisfied
and 30% were
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satisfied
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, after the improvements had
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gave the
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museum
a “
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rating, while those who felt
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made up 40%.

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people
who
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this figure dipped to 15%
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. Those who were
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dissatisfied
also
halved in proportion (5%). In both years 5% of the
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visitors
gave no response.
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