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The charts show investment in public transport in Europe and Africa for the years 2000 and 2010

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Charts are showing investments in public transport in two continents – Europe and Africa for two years – 2000 and 2010. The first chart shows the average length of city rail lines. Predictable, in 2010 rail lines are more kilometers than 2000. There is a small gap between Africa and Europe in 2000. Flowing this the length of rails in 2010 is more and with a big difference-8 and 12. The second chart shows transport workers per 1000 people. More people work in the transport industry in Europe than in Africa in the two years. It is predictable because the length of city rail lines is more in Europe. The other chart shows the public transport budget in billions. In Africa budget go down from 10 to a minimum of ¼ of it. In 2000 Europe give 20 billion dollars for public transport budget. The numbers go double in 2010 to 40 billion.
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in two continents
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Europe and Africa for two years
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2000 and 2010.

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the average length of city
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lines. Predictable, in 2010
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lines are more kilometers than 2000. There is a
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gap between Africa and Europe in 2000. Flowing this the length of rails in 2010 is more and with a
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big
difference-8 and 12.

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workers per 1000
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people
. More
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work in the
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industry in Europe than in Africa in the two years. It is predictable
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the length of city
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lines is more in Europe.

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the public
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budget in billions. In Africa budget go down from 10 to a minimum of ¼ of it. In 2000 Europe give 20 billion dollars for public
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budget. The numbers go double in 2010 to 40 billion.

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