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The charts illustrates consumption of three kinds of fas food by teenager in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.

The charts illustrates consumption of three kinds of fas food by teenager in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. LxeV
The given line graph represent the information about the utilization of fast foodstuffs by adolescents in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. It is clearly seen that, the depletion of hamburger had consumed by young persons was only 10 time per years in the initial year such as 1985. The use of hamburger continuously increased during 25 years of time period and finally it reached at 70. Secondly, the consumption of pizza was 60 time year in the starting by young people. whereas, it was decreased from 1985 to 2010 and in 2015 it reach at 10. On the other hand, in 1985 the usage of fried chicken was nearly 7 times eaten by individuals in beginning stage. After that, the number was increased till 2005. In year 2000, it reach at peek point virtually 60times. While, during 10year of time periods the use of chicken by youth were stable and in the last year it hold out approximately 62 time whole year. Overall, the most of the folks were prefer hamburger and least numbers of consumption was seeen by young was pizza.
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foodstuffs by adolescents in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.

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period and
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it reached at 70.
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eaten by individuals in beginning stage. After that, the number
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2000, it
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of chicken by youth were stable and in the last
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out approximately 62
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whole year.

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hamburger and least numbers of consumption was
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by young was pizza.

IELTS academic The charts illustrates consumption of three kinds of fas food by teenager in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.

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