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The charts compares information on different age groups of the population of Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 with a future projection 50 years later.

The charts compares information on different age groups of the population of Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 with a future projection 50 years later. j9b3y
The charts compares information on different age groups of the population of Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 with a future projection 50 years later. Regarding the population of Yemen in 2000, It is mainly composed of two major categories. With almost half of the country falling into the age group between 15-59 while the other half of the people are below 14 years of age. The elderly constitute only 3. 6% of the population. It is predicted for the group below 14 to decrease by almost 13% in coming 50 years while the other two age groups are expected to show minimal change. When we move to the demography data of Italy, Majority of the population are found in the group between 15-59 years. However when compared to Yemen, there are more elders in Italy with around 24% with prediction for this figure to even rise n the year 2050. In summary, the life expectancy of people in Italy tends to be higher than ones in Yemen while the birth rate in Yemen is greater than people in Italy.
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