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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. KM11
The given graphs provided illustrates information about occupancy in four areas to UK graduates and postgraduates excluding full-time jobs after finishing their studies in 2008. Overall, it is clear that while graduates was occuped in large amounts, postgraduates shown a considerably reduced number of jobs after finishing their academic programs. According to the figures presented in the two bar charts, initially, 17, 735 graduates found a job as a part time. In contrast, postgraduates reached 2, 535 part time works. It is noticed that voluntary work is the fewest area having graduates and postgraduates as well. It is followed by unemplyment sector that it was shown as the second most occuped area with 17, 850 between graduates and postgraduate professionals. Meanwhile, further study area saw a considerably positions with 29, 665 graduates and 2, 725 postgraduates. Finally, despite the graphs were not presented the full time, it is totally clear that graduates had a great superiority in numbers as they were 67, 000 approximately and postgraduates barely reach 7, 100.
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excluding full-time jobs after finishing their studies in 2008.

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shown a
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number of jobs after finishing their academic programs.

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found a job as a
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reached 2, 535
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had a great superiority in numbers as they were 67, 000 approximately and
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