Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say is the scariest to them. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say is the scariest to them. Dloya
The charts illustrate the information obtain by the survey regarding of the worst fear among population whose age are under 40 compare with the others. Overall, it is noticeable that the portion of the population conquer the fear of supernatural after they aged. However, replaced with the increase of people who stated to be horrify about their family members and relatives passing away. Focusing on the population under the age of 40. 35% are afraid of supernatural being which is consider to be a most fearsome factors among this age range. While occurance of accidents, accumulated debts and others fears are reported to be the scariest among people by approximately 20% in each catergory lowest albeit, are the death of family members which is only 4%. Turning to the others, the fear of their blood-related person passing away is more aware which is feared by one-third of the population in their late years. Followed by debts and accidents which is 25% and 20%, respectively. Whereas, ghost and other reasons are afraid by only a trivial amount of population that is approximately 10%.
The charts illustrate the information obtain by the survey regarding of the worst
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fear
among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
whose age
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "is".
are
under 40
Possible agreement error. The noun 'compare' seems to be countable, so consider using: "compares".
compare
with the others.

Overall
, it is noticeable that the portion of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
conquer the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fear
of supernatural after they aged.
However
, replaced with the increase of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who stated to be
Consider using a past participle here: "horrified".
horrify
about their family members and relatives passing away.

Focusing on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
under the age of 40. 35% are afraid of supernatural being which is
Consider using a past participle here: "considered".
consider
to be a most fearsome factors among this age range. While
Possible spelling mistake found.
occurance
of accidents, accumulated debts
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fears
are reported
to be the scariest among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
by approximately 20% in each
Possible spelling mistake found.
catergory
lowest albeit, are the death of family members which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
4%.

Turning to the others, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fear
of their blood-related person passing away is more aware which
is feared
by one-third of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
in their late years. Followed by debts and accidents which is 25% and 20%,
respectively
. Whereas, ghost and other reasons are afraid by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a trivial amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
that is
approximately 10%.

IELTS academic The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say is the scariest to them.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say is the scariest to them. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.