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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. mAen
the graphs below compare the number of tourists who travelled around the world from 1985 to 1995 and line graph provides information Australian’s portion of tourists from Japan. Overall it can be seen from the graphs that the flow of tourists traveling around the world has grown every year including a trip to Australia too. According to the first graph in the beginning of the graph (1885) around 5 million Japaneese traveled in different countries and these figures continued to increase every year except 1991 as the flow of tourists decreased slightly this year. Finally in the end of the graphs it reached a peak around 15 million japanese citizens traveled in different countries which was three times higher than in 1985. The line graph shows that in 1885 2 million Japaneese took a tour to Australia and for ten years, the number of people who comes to there has fluctuated. Between 1885 and 1888 the number of people grew almost proportionally every year and in 1888 the figures reached about 5 million but in 1898 the flow decreased dramatically by just over 4 million. The largest visit to Australia was in 1893 which was about 6. 2 million people but in the last year the number decreased again and was exactly 6 million
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IELTS academic The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

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