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The charts below show changes in the proportion of the energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.

The given pie charts compare the changes in the energy production share of five sources between year 1985 and 2003. Overall, the energy share of coal and natural gas grew while that of oil and nuclear power shrunk. However, oil still remained the biggest source of energy in both the years. Moving on to the details, despite a fall of 13%, oil's figures of 52% and 39% for years 1985 and 2003 were by fur the highest. In contrast, the energy generated from hydropower remained the lowest at a meagre 4% for both the years. During the same time, share rose from merely 8% to almost a quarter of the total energy (22%). A striking coincidence was witnessed in care of nuclear energy which showed and exactly opposite trend. It's contribution fell from 22% to just 8%. Finally, the share of natural gas had nearly doubled from 13% by year 1985 to 23% in 2003.
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changes
in the
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energy
production
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share
of five sources between year 1985 and 2003.

Overall
, the
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energy
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share
of coal and natural gas grew while that of oil and nuclear power shrunk.
However
, oil
still
remained the biggest source of
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energy
in both the years.

Moving on to the
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details
, despite a fall of 13%, oil's figures of 52% and 39% for years 1985 and 2003 were by fur the highest.
In contrast
, the
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energy
generated from hydropower remained the lowest at a
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meagre
4% for both the years.

During the same time,
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share
rose from
merely
8% to almost a quarter of the total
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energy
(22%). A striking coincidence
was witnessed
in care of nuclear
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energy
which
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showed
and exactly opposite trend.
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contribution fell from 22% to
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just
8%.
Finally
, the
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share
of natural gas had
nearly
doubled from 13% by year 1985 to 23% in 2003.
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IELTS academic The charts below show changes in the proportion of the energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.

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